In the busy and modern life, the demand of traveling is very necessary. Most of us try to find out some famous places such as Da Lat city or Mui Ne to travel on holidays. To me, those trips both cost much money and make me uncomfortable. Although there are a lot of tourist attractions to visit in our country, I just really love a small landscape with a cool stream near my house because of scenes here.
Thanks to the beauty of nature, that stream is an ideal place to visit. To me, nowhere is as beautiful as here. First, you will be surprised because the water is so clean and cool that you can see the bottom of stream clearly. No fish, no dust is in. one more thing is the sound of flowing water is like a melody of nature, which seems to create an interesting sounds. Under the face of the waters, there are full of colorful and multiform stones as grey, brown, yellow blue or white. It looks like a starlit night in the sky. Therefore, it is very useful for the people who want to have a collection of stones. You can even give them to your friends as impress and meaningful souvenirs. Also, the atmosphere is very natural and real with many trees covering at all. If you have a look in the distance, this landscape looks like a stream encompassed by mountains. All these points create a vaporous space as though you are in the immortal world. Here is great enough to spend the days off with your friends. If I have more an opportunity to travel, I will always think of that stream first because I can enjoy the beauty of nature with joyful feeling.
Because of its atmosphere, the stream is always the best place for me to take away the worries of life and studying. At the shore I can lie on the green grass, close the eyes, breath slowly and enjoy the beauty of sky, some white and black clouds drifting and bobbing, the breeze of wind blowing through my hair quietly. Especially when I jump into the stream, it seems that there is an electric current running inside the body. So the fresh and cool air makes me easier to get rid of stress. No one can interrupt me do anything. I really love the time I spent on because of it was very relax and comfortable. When having sadness, everyone often find out somewhere they feel better to forget it. And I have already had one.
Nowadays, in spite of living far away from my hometown, I often return when having days off because there is a great place to spend my leisure time beside my home. In near future, perhaps I will not work at my hometown, but I am sure that I will come back to enjoy the beauty of landscapes there with the feeling of free and peaceful in my soul.
12/11/09
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